Talk:Hinagiku Katsura/@comment-1936212-20121025033948

Here's some con crit.

1: It should not say"is the clone at nobody". That makes Nobody sound like a location. And by saying "Superman is" suggests that Superman was a clone to begin.

2: "Superman is the clone to one that circle of the blot." That makes no sense at all. No one can really understand what that means.

Also why is this OC called Superman Nobody. Your words suggest it's another nobody clone, but the title suggests it is Superman's nobody.

I'm sorry, but I think this character should be completely revamped.